Joanne Adylse Lynne

Is there going to be some sort of continuation? I'm following this!

If you're musical, you can probably try making this poem into lyrics. I was imagining a medieval woman caressing her lover as he lies by her, life fading. Beautiful.

This is good, but perhaps you could give it a little suspense? It feels like you've been rushing through the whole thing.

Thank you. =) It was actually something which did happen quite recently, right before I graduate from high school.

Keep doing this! I'm looking forward to reading your next chapters. This is going to be pretty awesome. =)

Good imagery, nice control of emotions. But there are some errors like: 'Good bye' (which should have been 'goodbye') and 'eye lids' (should have been 'eyelids'). Anyway, good job!

Thanks for your comment, and I'll sure think about your suggestion.=) 'Unbreathing' is certainly a word. Check it out in Secret Vampire, the first Night World novel by L.J. Smith. ...

American Wife by Curtis Stiffenfield. First, that was freaking boring. One of the reasons on why I don't usually read biographies. Second, that was um- too graphic? Tsk, tsk. Chucked ...

Hey dude, that's an interesting one!

As a matter of fact, I don't quite grasp what is really going on in the story. What happened to the sister? Did she get murdered or abducted or something?

That was really emotional and dark.